As previously mentioned on this blog, I am taking part in the Gearing Up To Get An Agent blogfest (GUTGAA) hosted by the amazing Deana Barnhart. This week is all about Pitch Polish and you can find my query and the first 150 words of my WIP The Last Queen here. Now, if you’ve read my query or part of my WIP before, know that my manuscript has been undergoing major revisions lately. I have also worked on my query, based on the comments I received a WriteOnCon. So I would be very grateful if you could have a look at my new pitch and give me some feedback on it. I’ll return the favour if you give me a link to your query in the comment section of this post!
And since I hate asking without giving, remember that you can still enter my 100 followers giveaway here and win books!
I checked out your query! Compared to what I saw at WriteOnCon, I think you’re doing a better job of showing us the story problem and the stakes. I, personally, don’t think having a large middle paragraph is a problem. You might want to push your self just a little furthur still. Try to convey a sense of Elian’s voice, and possibly shift the focus of the query away from the wedding (which is setup/semi-backstory) and more towards the situation of Elian protecting Araminta’s identity. (<–Their relationship is what intrigues me.)
Hope it's okay I decided to put my feedback here. Keep working at it!
Now, off to enter this lovely giveaway…
Thank you so much for your feedback, I really appreciate it! And good luck in the giveaway!