The 7 Line WIP Game & WIPpet Wednesday

Hello gentle reader,

A few weeks ago I was tagged by the lovely Rachel Horwitz in the 7 Line WIP Game meme (thanks Rachel for thinking of me!). I have also wanted to take part in the WIPpet Wednesday Blog Hop hosted by K.L. Schwengel for a while, so I thought today was a good day as any to share with you an excerpt from my Work In Progress LILY IN THE SHADOWS.

M.LIN Lights

LILY IN THE SHADOWS is a YA Historical Fantasy. Here is the pitch:

When all the flowers die in Victorian London, a streetwise flower girl with a love for books and a gift for getting into trouble investigates before the city descends into chaos and she loses everything.

In the following scene, Lily is coming home after a somewhat exciting day in London, but she is not made to feel as welcome as she was expecting…

Excerpt (unedited):

“So listen to this…”

Wes’s face darkened dangerously and my smile died on my lips. I realised his anger might be directed at me after all, and I didn’t finish my sentence, turning around to reconsider Elsie’s behaviour. Motionless, she was looking at us with wide eyes. In fact, the flat was so quiet I could hear the coal sputtering in the stove, the rain splattering against the tin roof and the neighbours having an argument next door.

I took a tiny step back from Wes, still unsure of what was wrong. His jaw was clenched and his lean body tensed. He scowled, his dark eyes fixed on me. My heartbeat quickened slightly, but my brain still refused to process the obvious: he was angry at me.

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12 thoughts on “The 7 Line WIP Game & WIPpet Wednesday

  1. kathils says:

    Yea!! A glimpse at LILY IN THE SHADOWS and I already love it. 🙂 Wes is making me a bit nervous, though. Beautifully set scene and mood.

  2. Oooh that’s really exciting! Why would Wes be so angry at her? I also love the attention to detail you’ve shown in describing the sounds outside of the flat. Riveting stuff!

  3. Kate Frost says:

    What happens next! This is the trouble with only posting a taster of your WIP. I totally agree with Kathi and Elaine about the skillful way you’ve set the scene – great characterisation too in such a short extract.

  4. Lauren Garafalo says:

    Gah! You TEASE, you! I also loved the way you described the sounds – the way you took us through her coming to the realization at the end. Can’t wait to read more!

  5. katemsparkes says:

    Excellent. You can feel the tension in just that few lines.

  6. ReGi McClain says:

    I feel Lily’s pain! It’s awful when it’s clear someone is livid with you but you have no idea what you’ve done yet.

  7. I love the way she’s missed (until now) that his anger was directed at her. Great tension!

  8. Krista Walsh says:

    But – but – why’s he so angry?! I need to know! The description in the first paragraph put me right in the middle of the scene – “I could hear the coal sputtering in the stove…” I can feel that painful silence like anxiety in my gut. So well done.

  9. EM Castellan says:

    Thanks everyone for all the nice comments 🙂

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